phrasing improvement

Co-authored-by: Nigel Megitt <[email protected]>

index.bs

@@ -2702,11 +2702,12 @@ Determining the W3C Decision</h4>
 	those other conditions must also be re-fulfilled.
 
 	<div class="example">
-		For example, to make [=substantive changes=] to a [=technical report=]
-		prior to publication as a [=Recommendation=],
-		it would need to go through a new [=Update Request=],
+		For example, if [=substantive changes=] to a [=technical report=]
+		are requested when assessing the transition from
+		[=Candidate Recommendation=] to [=Recommendation=],
+		the technical report would need to go through a new [=Update Request=],
 		be republished as a new [=Candidate Recommendation=],
-		and fulfill the criteria for advancement.
+		and that new version would need to fulfill the criteria for advancement.
 		Alternatively, the desired changes can be introduced as non-substantive amendments
 		using the process for [[#revising-rec|revising a Recommendation]].
 		However, they cannot be directly integrated between [=CRS=] and [=REC=],